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We were coming back
from the zoo
when I first heard this song
on her stereo,
a hot day -- so hot
you couldn't even open
the windows while you drive
the highway, at sixty miles per hour.

Who would have thought
that two years later
I'd be sitting
alone,
in my boxers
sipping cold Arak
spiced with cinnamon
©2009 ~Nesi
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WHAT IS IT

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What is what?

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You have a great command of the English language.

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"Let's eat, Grandpa!"

"Let's eat Grandpa!"


Be literate. Save lives.
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:)

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I like the combination of past up to present, there is a real clash of a happy moment mixed with a more lonely reality.

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Thanks :)

It needs some more work, though.

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Hmm. You could always build up the memories more, which would give the last stanza a heavier impact, but part of me liked the subtle brevity. How do you see it growing or changing?

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Actually, now in my drunken morning I reread it and I'm not sure that it needs more work.

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